Let's try this again and hope lj does not eat my comment! Bad, bad lj!
Not that I can remember my nice thoughtful comment, but here goes:
The tension in this part is so subtle that we want to forget it. Clark's got a job, he's made some decent friends and why can't things just be good for a time? But you threw in some pretty subtle forshadowing with:
"“Em, I think that’s prison—you know, don’t ask what you’re in for? I mean, they say that in the movies, I’ve never been in prison.” and this stands out to me because it's not what I would have said in response to Eric's questions, and yet it is quintessentially Clark.
Prison? What sort of prison will it be? Oh Roxy, you make me all shivery. Where's Whitney's coat?
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4/15/07 05:07 am (UTC)Not that I can remember my nice thoughtful comment, but here goes:
The tension in this part is so subtle that we want to forget it. Clark's got a job, he's made some decent friends and why can't things just be good for a time? But you threw in some pretty subtle forshadowing with:
"“Em, I think that’s prison—you know, don’t ask what you’re in for? I mean, they say that in the movies, I’ve never been in prison.” and this stands out to me because it's not what I would have said in response to Eric's questions, and yet it is quintessentially Clark.
Prison? What sort of prison will it be? Oh Roxy, you make me all shivery. Where's Whitney's coat?