you wrote: ((Clark took a deep shaky breath. Should he go in and take Jason out of there? He listened against his will to the sounds coming from the house…he backpedaled from the house, stepping faster and faster, putting distance between himself and the sound—he should be running forward, towards the house. He just couldn't.))___
So not only is your AU version of Clark a pervert with verbal diareah. You make him into the type of person who runs away from someone who is crying out for help. I'm sure there are people who enjoy this sort of thing. I'm not one of them. This is where I have to stop reading-because it makes me want to throw up. You seem to take a perverse pleasure in the torture of Jason. Even having Superboy running away from helping him. I think your summary needs to be more explicit about warning the readers what they're getting into.
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4/30/09 11:26 pm (UTC)So not only is your AU version of Clark a pervert with verbal diareah. You make him into the type of person who runs away from someone who is crying out for help. I'm sure there are people who enjoy this sort of thing. I'm not one of them. This is where I have to stop reading-because it makes me want to throw up. You seem to take a perverse pleasure in the torture of Jason. Even having Superboy running away from helping him. I think your summary needs to be more explicit about warning the readers what they're getting into.