Okay, proper feedback - I thought the fact that this story was told from a point in which Whitney is still overseas was awesome. I've never seen that before. And, was Bruce on his journey of self-discovery/training in preparation to becoming Batman, or was it something else? Also, that Whiney was contemplating Lana's letter, and how shitty it was (cowardly bitch - I don't have a lot of respect for what she did, can you tell?)
I loved Whit's comparison of Clark and Bruce, how Bruce made him think of Clark, but not really. That was a cool bit, and resonated with me. Also, his thoughts on Clark and Lex *fans self* Interesting that he pictures himself the top to those two...
tugging at the hem of his shorts and then slipping fingertips under the fabric Got your kink in there - Yay! It's mine now, too, thanks to you. *mwah*
ingertips just stroking the sweat-tacky skin of his balls and Whit's head dropped back, his hips jerked and trembled, his knees dropped open. Like Bruce, I'm a sucker for this kind of responsiveness. Wonderfully described.
The paragraph that starts with this: Whit didn't hear the sound he made when he turned back to Bruce makes me whimper. And I did it again when Bruce says 'show me' and Whitney does.
The whole bit around Bruce touching Whitney's entrance for the first time and the conversation around that - guh!
Whitney fucking himself on Bruce's fingers, Bruce losing his composure and control = more whimpering and guhs from me.
And, even better, the end leaves it open for more. Even if you don't do it, I can imagine it.
Excellent porny piece. I loved every word. There was so much more I could have included - wonderful turns of phrase (likening the streets to a celtic know, for example), how Whit couldn't let thoughts of Clark go (this boy knows how to fixate), etc. etc. But, I had to curtail myself. Just know, you have an fantastic story here.
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1/9/11 06:45 am (UTC)I loved Whit's comparison of Clark and Bruce, how Bruce made him think of Clark, but not really. That was a cool bit, and resonated with me. Also, his thoughts on Clark and Lex *fans self* Interesting that he pictures himself the top to those two...
tugging at the hem of his shorts and then slipping fingertips under the fabric Got your kink in there - Yay! It's mine now, too, thanks to you. *mwah*
ingertips just stroking the sweat-tacky skin of his balls and Whit's head dropped back, his hips jerked and trembled, his knees dropped open. Like Bruce, I'm a sucker for this kind of responsiveness. Wonderfully described.
The paragraph that starts with this: Whit didn't hear the sound he made when he turned back to Bruce makes me whimper. And I did it again when Bruce says 'show me' and Whitney does.
The whole bit around Bruce touching Whitney's entrance for the first time and the conversation around that - guh!
Whitney fucking himself on Bruce's fingers, Bruce losing his composure and control = more whimpering and guhs from me.
And, even better, the end leaves it open for more. Even if you don't do it, I can imagine it.
Excellent porny piece. I loved every word. There was so much more I could have included - wonderful turns of phrase (likening the streets to a celtic know, for example), how Whit couldn't let thoughts of Clark go (this boy knows how to fixate), etc. etc. But, I had to curtail myself. Just know, you have an fantastic story here.