fic post.

10/25/06 12:52 am
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Title:Mariposa
Fandom: SV (no, really…)
Pairing: n/a—yet.
Rating: 2 (mildly disturbing imagery brief, but very intense attack of mary-sue-ity, language)
Summary: This is the land of AU-ness. Nothing ever goes the way you think it will. You were warned. *pets you*.

Soooo, that resolve lasted--what, a couple of days? Here she goes again. This one has no pairing as of yet, no sex, no brain-grinding angst, no superpowers. There will be Whitney--there will be Lex. How I'm not completely sure yet. I just love throwing myself into the void. *pulls you with me*



Mariposa

We delight in the beauty of the butterfly, but rarely admit the changes it has gone through to achieve that beauty.
~Maya Angelou




“Like I said, I was sitting in the station, yeah, Granville Central train station and boy, they give themselves some airs callin’ themselves Granville…anyway, I’m doing the usual, burying my face in a book so I don’t have to deal with the stares…oh please. Look at me. I’m a large woman of color, out here in the ass ba—in the country. Swear to God, you’d think these people didn’t have TV or something. Half of them look like they’re waiting for me to pull out the eagle and half of them look like they want to hire me to watch their kids…see—you laughin’. You get it.” I shifted my big ass in their little ass chair and checked out the baby cop in front of me. White, and blonde, but cute as hell with big steel blue eyes…

“So, I’m feeling eyes on me—normal in this part of the country—and I look up with the Death Look, and here’s this little boy, and he just…damn, there’s this look on his face, lost and scared and—everything in his eyes, right? You can read his damn face like a book and I was getting a bad feeling. I’m trying to play him off anyway ‘cause sometime all they want is a pop, no matter how fu—‘xcuse me—darn upset they look, y’know?”

I take a sip of the fucking awful coffee they give me and I can’t help making a face, BabyCop makes a face with me, he knows the coffee’s shit.

“So, kid is looking over to the pay phones all nervous like, and lookin’ at me, and some guy comes out, some ugly pasty guy. He looks like a plucked worm, y’know?” Looked like a fucking pervert, s’what he looked like. “Any way, he come over and I’m thinking it’s his pop, he grabs the boy’s arm and tells him to be still and not talk. He touches the kid, and the boy, he flinches. I don’t mean like, ‘Damn, he’s gonna pop me one’, I mean flinch like he’s afraid the guy is gonna beat him ‘til he bleeds, like he’s afraid to death.”

Fuck. I have to stop and breathe a little, shit, that shit upset me. “So, fucker goes back to the phone… oh, thanks, honey, I didn’t think you could smoke anywhere anymore.”
Thank god, beautiful and generous. Cute smile, Lord, forgive me. Nice package too.

“I gotta say, ‘s cigarette’s right on time, damn.” Man, he got some beautiful eyes and let me control my self. “Okay, the fucker goes back to the phones and the boy looks at me like—shit, he’s terrified, and I thought he was even too scared to cry. You seen kids too scared to cry, to make a sound? Right, those are the kids that get the shit kicked out of them on the daily, but this kid, when I sat next to him—yeah, yeah, I’m stupid, I got up and sat next to the boy. And he didn’t freeze me out, you see what I’m sayin’? Right. Abused kids don’t ask for help. Not that age. They hide it. And he asked me, he whispered, ‘help me’.”

Fuck, I had to shiver again. That kid sounded so hopeless, so sure nothing was going to change… “Fucker came back and tried to yell at me, cursin’ and shit, but the ticket guy came running over, and man, that mother fucker took off--ran! Excuse my language but he was lucky as hell, ‘cause I ‘bout ready to kick his narrow whi—his ass. ‘Your pop?’ I asked the kid, and he said no and burst into tears. Fuck.”

Man, I got pissed off all over again, remembering and BabyCop patted my shoulder. Yeah, buddy, sometimes it was good to be old an’ gray. Even if he was more commiserating between dudes than trying to imagine me twenty again. “So that’s it. That’s how we come to call the cops, and that’s how we found that little lost baby.”

BabyCop was thanking me, and taking my number and telling me that they’d probably get in touch and was I going far, and I said, not far enough. Fuck Now I was involved I guess, but…shit. The worst part—I know that mother fucker hurt that kid. He hurt that kid in the worst fucking way, I was sure off it. Life’s a mother fucking bitch and she don’t play. And my ass was cold, ‘cause I gave the kid my jacket…oh well. Shit. He needed it more that me, I guess….

******

He was wrapped up in a red cotton windbreaker, sitting on the exam table when his mother and father were led into the room, and he cried a long time, sitting on his mothers lap, with his dad’s arms around him. His mother cried too, and cried harder when her fingers glanced over the Power Ranger band-aid still on his knee, brown with dirt and old blood. His father’s sobs were the most painful to hear for the boy. In all his life, he could never remember the sound of his father crying. It frightened him almost as much as pain and darkness had.

After several long minutes, the doctor came into the room and led the adults out, to stand in the hall. The boy sat still on the table where he’d been left, trying not to squirm. There was still a little pain. Through an unshuttered window in the wall, he could look out to the hall, and he watched his parents talking to the nice doctor, watched his mother fold up and start to fall, like a broken bird, and his father’s face go pale and white. The boy thought his face was as white as the sheet he was sitting on. He pushed his arms in to the long, long sleeves of the jacket and tried to wrap it around himself, and watched his parents through the glass.


TBC

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10/25/06 05:30 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] ladydey.livejournal.com
I thought you were taking a break?!?

Well, as long as my two favorite fellas are in this land of AU-ness, I'm here.

This seems interesting...

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10/25/06 03:46 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Well...I took all the break I could stand. *embarrassed smile*

And I'm sorry, but it's going to take a long time before Lex shows up in this story. Clark has a lot of things happen to him, and Lex is one of the last things to happen. This is probably the AU to beat all AU's *g*



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10/25/06 03:55 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] ladydey.livejournal.com
This is going to painful, isn't?!!?

I'm down for a character study in the land of AUs (as long as Lex is one of the good things to happen to Clark, or not as bad things, I'm game.)

As for your break I am sure we all prefer you writing and happy to taking a break and nuts!

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10/25/06 04:41 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Not as painful as some other things I've written. I'm thinking maybe a little sad, but not 'rip your heart out and stomp on it' kind of thing....

Lex will pretty certainly not be a bad thing--I'm nearly certain he'll be a good thing. Yes. Pretty darn sure. *g*

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10/25/06 05:43 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] dawnybee.livejournal.com
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! When I read your ending of Deal and you said you weren't sure if you'd write another SV fic again, my heart went OW! So YAY NEW ROXYMISSROSE FIC!!!!

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10/25/06 03:47 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Ha-well--I hope this actually goes somewhere. I'm taking a big risk doing it as a WIP but. I can't shut up, you know. *g*

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10/25/06 05:52 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] supercaptain182.livejournal.com
*Wipes brow* I'm glad your break is over.

Now, I'm wiping my eyes, because this was sheer poetry. The description of the mother folding up like a broken bird, my God, that took my breath away. Seriously.

I'm really hoping there's more soon.

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10/25/06 03:48 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Wow, thank you lovey! Thank you so much! I hope that I can keep it going.

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10/25/06 05:54 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] rosy5000.livejournal.com
Keep writing fic like this and I will gladly follow you into the void! :D I'm already sucked into this fic.

I will repeat what I said in my review of "The Dog"... you are a Goddess! :D

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10/25/06 03:48 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
I hope this doesn't disappoint you, my dear!

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10/25/06 05:51 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] rosy5000.livejournal.com
You haven't yet so I'm not worried. :)

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10/25/06 05:57 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] norwich36.livejournal.com
I can't tell who the kid is yet, or what exactly is going on, but I'm hooked already. Very atmospheric. And I say, get down with the Marysueing. It's only REALLY a Marysue if the writing is bad--and your writing is NEVER bad. (Is this the AU where you rescue Whitney and/or Lex from abuse? Because that would be FUN.)

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10/25/06 03:51 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
LOL! Okay, that whole voice at the top of the thing is me. *grin* and it was lots of fun, too. *G*
As for what's happening, the next bit will clear it up, and there will be lots of Whitney, but not much abuse. Yet. Clark might take a beating in this story, and Lex isn't a presence at all until much later.

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10/25/06 06:53 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] miche-connor.livejournal.com
*dances and dances*

I know you said no more, but... EEE! my heart rejoices. Now, you gotta explain, Roxy. Please? More? What's the story? Where's the beef?

*grins*

Loves you! :)

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10/25/06 03:54 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
So, the story...do you want to know now, or just find out as it goes along? I can e-mail you with details if you want ot know know--you can tell me what you think. *g*

I really did think that was it, I was so exhausted at the end of Deal. And here we go again--I reeeeeelly can't keep my brain shut. *G*

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10/25/06 08:49 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] miche-connor.livejournal.com
Sure, email me with details, bay-bee! It won't spoil it, cause you and I both know that sometimes these characters have minds of their own and dang, they will do what they WILL do! *laughs*

And I have to finish reading Deal. I got sidetracked with Miss Ripley, who insisted that I read her first, and then I signed up for all these challenges. <--silly me! tee hee. :P :)

OH I loved Dog, btw. Just loved it. SO much. I love big stories anyway, and it was just... *sigh* so sad and perfect and eee. I want to go read it again. And I detest that comment thing that poor teot is using. It .still. will not let me post anything there, so you get me spamming THIS entry on your journal with my squees. :)Hehe.

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10/25/06 06:54 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] tabaqui
Wait, wait wait.
Have i read part one? What's going on???

Dude. Please. Linkity me with part one or tag or *something*.
*smooch*

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10/26/06 03:37 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
This is the first part, lovey! You're good!

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10/26/06 05:31 am (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] tabaqui
It is? I thought it said 2!!
*flails*
Okay.
:)

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10/25/06 10:18 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] carolandtom.livejournal.com
You've made me so happy with this post!

You are writing SV again and you are writing a Clark-centric fic! I couldn't be happier, honestly!

I see there's a new part posted. Can't wait to read it!

Marvellous writing!

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10/26/06 03:37 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
See how I love you?

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10/26/06 05:34 am (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] tabaqui
Ahhhhhh, man. Love it. Poor little boy! And oh, his rescuing angel that gave him her jacket!
:)
*bounce*

Good stuff! Want more!

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10/26/06 11:20 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
and so you shall have more--so much more, little one!

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10/26/06 11:39 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] tabaqui
Wheeeeeee!
*twirls you*

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10/26/06 03:02 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] rumpuso.livejournal.com
Alright Roxy, you know me. I'm the perpetually confused person with a lot of questions. Your description of the story is this...

\\this one has no pairing as of yet, no sex, no brain-grinding angst, no superpowers. There will be Whitney--there will be Lex. How I'm not completely sure yet. I just love throwing myself into the void. *pulls you with me*\\

So, I'm thinking that this story will just be a Whitney and Lex story, which isn't my thing so I will probably pass. THEN I read the comments and I see Carol is excited this is a Clark-centric story, and then Mel and I are chatting on MSN this morning and she tells me you are writing a Clark-centric story. So I read chapter one and I see this description of the little kid...

\\White, and blonde, but cute as hell with big steel blue eyes\\

and I'm thinking this kid must be a young Whitney. But the comments from people are making it sound like this is Clark...which equals me as confused. Mel says chapter 2 is definitely Clark, so I'm heading over there next.

But, who is this little boy in this chapter? Is this Whitney but he was thankfully rescued?

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10/26/06 04:05 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
\\White, and blonde, but cute as hell with big steel blue eyes\\

No, no! that's the cop--Baby Cop--she was checking out the police man while she was telling the story because frankly. His description's there to explain part of what attracts Clark's to Whitney, unconsciously.

*HUG* It is all about Clark, really!

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10/26/06 05:04 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] rumpuso.livejournal.com
\\His description's there to explain part of what attracts Clark's to Whitney, unconsciously.\\
So when you fast forward this into the future, Clark's attraction to Whitney might be in part due to familiarity the feeling of safety that the cop from long ago gave him? Very good! I understand now.

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10/28/06 09:12 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] beet
Ooh!
New fic!
I still haven't had the chance to finish deal, but someday... maybe in December... Urf.

But this beginning - so sad! I'm not sure who the little boy is, but he's already caught me. Yay, next parts are already posted!

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10/28/06 09:23 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] beet
I wanted to come back and say that I agree with what someone else said (okay, with a lot of various things that lots of other people said).

One - gorgeous language and descriptions. You always make OCs immediately engaging and so interesting!
Two - your first narrator is great, but something about the formatting of the text is confusing. Thoughts and spoken words blend together and I started out reading it as a woman, but ended up reading the character as a man. I think it was the line about commisserating between dudes at the end that did it. That or I just slashed your fic, Roxy! LOL!

Anyway, as I was still thinking about this after reading the second part, I figured I ought to say something. Love you, babe!

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10/28/06 10:51 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
okay--thanks sweetie. I'll have to pick that first bit apart some to try and make it work better. It seemed to confuse a lot of folks. I wanted to give that impression of following the interior dialogue as well as spoken dialogue, but I managed to make people confuse the description of the cop with the boy(clark).
Back to the porn mines! *G*

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1/24/07 01:16 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] lexophilia.livejournal.com
See, I'm a whore 'cause I waiting until you were done to start reading. I find that reading your fics all in one big swoop is much more potent for me. Yes, I will probably suffer severe psychological trauma. Yes, I will probably cry my eyes out at some point. But what is a story without some major fucking conflict, and I know you will BRING IT! umm, It's already been brought in at this point, I guess.

*reads and stares at those that bother me*

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1/24/07 03:41 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
YaY! *huggles* Jump in, but this is only the end of part one. But, it can be read as a finished fic, I think. I was thinking about posting it at SSA already. Part two is goig to be very different than part one...at least that's what I'm planning. Hah! yeah, we know how *my* plans go!


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3/18/07 08:31 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] herohunter.livejournal.com
AHHHH!!! *runs off for more*

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3/19/07 12:21 am (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
YaY!!!!

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3/7/10 03:26 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] priscel.livejournal.com
aww that poor baby haha and thank goodness for the sassy lady! Yea, *shakes head* we can always feel them looking. At least being out in the middle of bum-fuck did have them eying her as a suspect for poor little boys' hurts. And she helped save him who may have been seen again. I think if lot of people were more observant in the right ways, they'd see more maybe more kids would saved. Or maybe they'd be called nosy ^_^

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3/7/10 08:19 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Oh hi! How cool is it to get a comment on this! *G*

I agree with you about being observant--it's a close line between that and being nosy but thank goodness some people don't care! :)

Thanks for reading!

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