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10/20/07 04:46 pm
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Does anyone want to look at my Halloween Challenge ficlet? I need to know if it's confusing or not...*winsome smile, big shimmery eyes*

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10/20/07 09:03 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] danceswithgary
There you are! I was just thinking I needed to drop you a note because I missed your winsome smile and big shimmery eyes.

Send it on over if you like. danceswithgary AT yahoo.com. *hugs*

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10/20/07 09:15 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
oooooh, thank you!! *hughug* It's on it's way!

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10/20/07 09:53 pm (UTC)
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Posted by [personal profile] danceswithgary
Replying back has failed three times, so here's my notes:

I love the premise. I like the stream of consciousness/internal
dialogue. The spacings a little funky in places and might need a littlemore clarification on who's speaking when, but not much. A little fuzzy on whether or not Clark was drunk or not.

I looked at the ending and I really like the tie back to the beginning with the 'other world'. Maybe you're uncomfortable with Lex being left scared, just before that ending, perhaps a sentence or two that makes it clear that Clark was able to relieve that fright.

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10/20/07 09:58 pm (UTC)
Posted by [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
Hey, do you want to try sending it to roxymissrose@yahoo.com? I'm not sure if that will work, but it's obvious something is wrong with my mail at comcast. I thought my beloved fixed it. :(